Is anyone here good with pronouns?!!
 

Im pulling my hair out here trying to figure out what is wrong with this sentence. Apparently it has incorrect use of pronouns.

((((Tim has been promoted to Executive Vice President and has 35 people who will report to him. This is something he's been hoping for.))))

Any help from anyone will help me out soooooo much:D

Go svx :tongue:

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"Tim has been promoted to Executive Vice President and has 35 people who report to him. This is something he's been hoping for." ??

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So I’m not sure but, here’s my guess.

The second sentence refers to ‘this’ but it is not crystal clear what ‘this’ is. It could be: 1) Tim becoming vice president 2)That he has 35 people 3) or that these 35 people will report to him. So the pronoun 'this' is not correct because it is not clear which of the 3 it refers to. So 'this' needs to be replaced by a noun...... Maybe:D

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+1

The reference to "this" was not clear enough.

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Thank you so much! your a life saver:D

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Tim has been promoted to Executive Vice President and has 35 people who report to him. This is something he'd been hoping for.

Who will report needs to be who report since the first part puts it all in past tense.
Gotta continue the past tense also in the second line. - he's (he has) must be he'd (he had)

P.S.
"you're" a life saver

:P

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Passing the pronoun problem, the second sentence ends in a preposition, which is something a sentence should never do! :eek:

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This is something he'd been hoping would happen. ???

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How about this, and it is just a suggestion:

*Tim has been promoted to Executive Vice President. Thirty five people will now report to him. [This] is something for which he had been hoping.*

Agreed that "this" should be more specific, since the first sentence actually is two ideas. The "this" is an imprecise reference, and unclear as to what it is referring. Without being sure myself, I can't suggest which it is referring to. If I knew, I would probably change the third sentence to an *, and* clause, replacing [this], as an addendum to the pertinent sentence. It would probably be more polite to assume that the promotion is the object of hope, rather than the subordination of others, if one had to make an assumption. The third sentence would work better as a clause to one of the others, in order not to have a sentence standing alone with a passive voice, with the verb "is".

*Tim has been promoted to Executive Vice President, and is something for which he had been hoping. Thirty five people will now report to him.*

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Agree completely. I just didn't feel like thinking that much.

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((((Tim can has been promoted to Executive Vice President and can has 35 people who will report to him. This is something he can has hoping for.))))

grammar cat fixed it.

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I'm going to give your pronoun problem to "Rosie Red Pen." She was an English teacher for 35 years. She will solve it and I will post it tomorrow.

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Tell me you don't have the network doing your homework for you... :rolleyes:

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That sounds like a good idea to me!